The Story of a Picture.


This is a photograph that I really like because I go out with my dog Charly. This photo was taken on September 18, 2015. I remember we were at my parents' house next to my brother and we decided to go out for a walk with Charly. It was a nice sunny day. We drove to the Racing Club Stadium in San Clemente and played all afternoon. Charly ran like never in her life. We had a ball and we threw very far and we returned with the ball to repeat the game. The photo was taken by my brother before returning to the house. This photo I like because it is a nice memory of Charly, my first and only dog. I miss him a lot, there is not a day when I do not remember him, because he was one more member of our family, a brother and a great friend. I miss you my dear friend :’(
 


3 comentarios:

  1. That is very sad brother :(
    I also had a dog that lived with me for 13 years. Dogs are beautiful friends !

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  2. The whole idea is well developed. Clear discourse with minor inconsistencies. Check on paragraphing: https://awc.ashford.edu/PDFHandouts%5CHow%20to%20Write%20a%20Good%20Paragraph_final.pdf

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  3. On the overall the text is clear. Paragraphing is faulty though. Cohesive though lexical and grammar range is limited to both past and present.
    160 words.

    T: 2,5 , L: 2, G: 2,5= 7 POINTS
    GRADE: 5.5

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