This is a
photograph that I really like because I go out with my dog Charly. This photo
was taken on September 18, 2015. I remember we were at my parents' house next
to my brother and we decided to go out for a walk with Charly. It was a nice
sunny day. We drove to the Racing Club Stadium in San Clemente and played all
afternoon. Charly ran like never in her life. We had a ball and we threw very
far and we returned with the ball to repeat the game. The photo was taken by my
brother before returning to the house. This photo I like because it is a nice
memory of Charly, my first and only dog. I miss him a lot, there is not a day
when I do not remember him, because he was one more member of our family, a
brother and a great friend. I miss you my dear friend :’(
That is very sad brother :(
ResponderEliminarI also had a dog that lived with me for 13 years. Dogs are beautiful friends !
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